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A raptor’s broken wing rests upon
the breast of Love’s fiery blaze,
raw and organic, just like any
love I have seen. With the fusion
of swords, I rest for you, the
only love I have ever ceased
to feel; and fighting for life,
I perish in darkness, for the
refusal of your spirit brings
anguish to my being.

I would die for you. I would do
anything to claim you as my own.
My secret lover, though universal,
for I want the love we share to
grow and inspire into hundreds of
millions of other compassionate
novels, each their own.

Your heart rests in mine until they
beat as one, convulsing with the
strength of two, yet though stitched
together with the most delicate
fabric, it lives on beyond its
most wildest years.

And as the raptors takes its plight,
I can remember your face so tender
and fragile, twisting into obscurity
as I fall to my demise from the late
cascades of torture. Pain is poetic
only when the poem is fit to seem
like her life’s destiny is to crumble
into the fire.
©2006-2009 ~MUSICxxJUNKIE
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Author's Comments

Inspired by the movie of the same title, even though I only saw the last 20 minutes of it.

Be nice, this is only experimental since I've had writers block for a while.

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:iconrequiemlullabies:
Makes me wonder what that movie was about. Beautifully written. :heart:
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
It was about love and loss pretty much. And how these two girls had to hide their relationship because they went to an all girls school, I think. I didn't see much of it, but the parts I did were incredible. :heart: Thank you!

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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }
:iconhi-mi-tsu:
nice. I like it.

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Heaven's not enough, if when I'm there I don't remember you...
Don't read beauty magazines, they will only make you feel ugly.
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~Writers is pimpin' cool.
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
Thanks.

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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }
:icontearingmascara:
its such a sad and lovely poem. i really liked it, i felt the words take me into another place somewhere in the middle.

"i would die for u" i adore that line.

i think the idea of secret love is VERY romantic, but its so sad when it has to be stopped just because the pair had to go through so much to stay together in the first place. trust me, i know, i've seen it.

very beautiful.

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Tools of the trade: Pen, paper & a piece of my heart
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
I know what you mean. My first relationship was with another girl, and we didn't want to be made fun of and all that other prejudice, wonderful stuff, so we pretty much had to hide our relationship from everybody, and it really sucked. Felt like I was being stuck in a cage.

Thank you, though. :hug:


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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }
:iconfaintstarscry:
ok, first thing's first, i'm laughing so hard at this poem. i can really imagine you slaving over how the poem has to be ABSOLUTELY perfect. :D

anyway, i really like the details in the poem. it's something different and fresh from you :hug:
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
Actually I tried following your advice again and just wing it, I didn't even stop myself because of grammatical errors. I was writing this at like... 1 am or something, so I was like "Just fuck it and write something."

Thanks. :smooch:


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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }
:iconatoxicdelight:
Beautiful poem. It is full of detail, rich with its imagery. I thought it was so well written, I don't have a single complaint about it. Great job. :+fav:
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
Wow, this was one of those 10 minute pieces. ^^;
Thank you so much! :heart:


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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }

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